Can't Slow Down
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Can't Slow Down
by Atone the Underdog Wed Aug 07, 2013 10:32 am
(Chorus)x2
They said i aint nothin special, i'm just a wanna be
never gonna ammount to anything, but now they gonna see
i'm never gonna stop, i'mma keep on goin now
fightin to the top, and i aint slowin down
(Verse)
Somethin tell's me i musta been born with this gift
put my feelings in these words to help me up-lift
when i'm feelin down, and i need a olittle pick-me-up
i just put this pen to work and i get sick as fuck
put you in my shoe's, take a walk with me thru the hell i been thru
fightin with the devil, demons on my shoulder, and this is what i give you
monsters in my nightmares, but i fight til i see them angels in my dreams
i aint really a dangerous man i'm just lettin off some steam
and all you really gotta do is listen to these words to find out what i mean
pay attention, let me explain my pain to tame me
they said i would never make it, but look what became of me
visious on this micro-phone, like i'm letting out the beast
what your hearin is the bark and i'm comin off the leash
nothin gonna hold me back, nothing gonna keep me down
i'm comin ready to snap, and nothings gonna stop me now
(Chorus)
Link Of Feed: https://matdemaz.forumotion.com/t171-redemption#10871
They said i aint nothin special, i'm just a wanna be
never gonna ammount to anything, but now they gonna see
i'm never gonna stop, i'mma keep on goin now
fightin to the top, and i aint slowin down
(Verse)
Somethin tell's me i musta been born with this gift
put my feelings in these words to help me up-lift
when i'm feelin down, and i need a olittle pick-me-up
i just put this pen to work and i get sick as fuck
put you in my shoe's, take a walk with me thru the hell i been thru
fightin with the devil, demons on my shoulder, and this is what i give you
monsters in my nightmares, but i fight til i see them angels in my dreams
i aint really a dangerous man i'm just lettin off some steam
and all you really gotta do is listen to these words to find out what i mean
pay attention, let me explain my pain to tame me
they said i would never make it, but look what became of me
visious on this micro-phone, like i'm letting out the beast
what your hearin is the bark and i'm comin off the leash
nothin gonna hold me back, nothing gonna keep me down
i'm comin ready to snap, and nothings gonna stop me now
(Chorus)
Link Of Feed: https://matdemaz.forumotion.com/t171-redemption#10871
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Re: Can't Slow Down
by mdemaz Wed Aug 07, 2013 11:30 am
Your writing skills...
Everything seems on-beat.
Inspired me to write something like this myself.
Everything seems on-beat.
Inspired me to write something like this myself.
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Re: Can't Slow Down
by Eedee Wed Aug 07, 2013 11:54 am
How the fuck can it seem "on-beat"? There's no beat to this...
Your verse structures have a lot to be desired and with a song like "Can't Slow Down", I'd expect more rhymes from you, dawg. I know you can do it.
Your verse structures have a lot to be desired and with a song like "Can't Slow Down", I'd expect more rhymes from you, dawg. I know you can do it.
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Re: Can't Slow Down
by mdemaz Wed Aug 07, 2013 12:09 pm
Numb nut.
I rapped this to one of the beats you were blaring.
I rapped this to one of the beats you were blaring.
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Re: Can't Slow Down
by Atone the Underdog Wed Aug 07, 2013 2:32 pm
WELL SHIT...i should go full on canibus with the 2nd verse of this
Stabbin u while u fappin to my rappin
stop laughin you faggot i caught you jackin
in a michael jackson jacket you bastard
Stabbin u while u fappin to my rappin
stop laughin you faggot i caught you jackin
in a michael jackson jacket you bastard
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Re: Can't Slow Down
by metalchick Thu Aug 08, 2013 2:00 pm
Don't forget to pull out a notepad.
Btw, well done.
If you really think you deserve this music thing, then go for it.
Btw, well done.
If you really think you deserve this music thing, then go for it.
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Re: Can't Slow Down
by Atone the Underdog Sat Aug 10, 2013 1:13 pm
feedback like this is why i love writing
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Re: Can't Slow Down
by Alexus2267 Sun Aug 18, 2013 2:04 pm
nice read
although its a bit off in some parts
id like to hear this on a beat
although its a bit off in some parts
id like to hear this on a beat
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